Blue Sky Lies

No sunny Southern California blue sky
watched over me
the day everything changed.
I grew up under an honest sun.
Shining high in the cerulean sky
it brought warmth.

But here that celestial orb
when it deigned to appear
was a stone cold liar.

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For this week’s Quadrille Monday at dVerse Poets Pub, Grace wants us to write a 44-word poem using some form of the word sun. In addition to being the 83rd Quadrille prompt, it is the 8th anniversary of dVerse. I don’t know if I made it to the pub on opening day, but I was a regular pretty early on. I’ve learned a lot of what I know about poetry from this blog and my fellow poetry cronies.

For this prompt, I decided to take the opening paragraphs of my memoir (which is still seeking a publisher) and turn them into a poem. As I did, I noted some word choices that could be improved upon in the memoir itself. Love when that happens.

About Linda Kruschke

I am a Jesus Freak, and I don't care who knows it. I am a wife, mother, sister, aunt, daughter, and friend. My blood family is only part of the larger family of Christ that I belong to. I love to write, especially about my dear Savior.
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7 Responses to Blue Sky Lies

  1. This one is full of mystery to me, and, not fear exactly, but unknowing… Well done.

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  2. Sabio Lantz says:

    Interesting imagery — I could see it as a beginning of a story. For in itself, it leaves nothing but questions of what you are getting at.

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  3. Love that stone cold liar attribution. I don’t think, as a SoCal native myself, I could survive without the sun. It’s so true how the weather affects us. Nice to “see” you Linda.

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    • It’s nice to be back, at least a bit, at dVerse. I think we’ve had this conversation before, but I tend not to participate and link if I don’t have time to read at least some of the other poems. Lately there’s not been that time.

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  4. That last line thuds down onto the page. This is one to read aloud, there’s a lot of power in the sound and the rhythm.

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  5. Frank Hubeny says:

    Very nice comparison between the “honest sun” and the “stone cold liar” version. I hadn’t thought of the sun being like that before.

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