Wondering Why

Swirling thoughts implode upon each other
in a dance I can’t control though I try
to refocus emotions that smother
radiant heat of sun high in blue sky
I wrestle with questions wondering why
my life filled with memories of trauma
center stage twirling mind bending drama
into a new day as triggers abound
I cling to what came after the comma
my Savior’s voice a sweet comforting sound

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I’m so excited to try a new poetry form today. It’s called a Dizain. Grace provided a lesson in how to write one yesterday at dVerse Poets Pub. The Dizain is one stanza consisting of 10 lines, with 10 syllables per line, and the rhyme scheme is ababbccdcd. Easy peasy, right?

About Linda Kruschke

I am a Jesus Freak, and I don't care who knows it. I am a wife, mother, sister, aunt, daughter, and friend. My blood family is only part of the larger family of Christ that I belong to. I love to write, especially about my dear Savior.
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12 Responses to Wondering Why

  1. I like your rhymes and works so well to your final affirmation of faith.

  2. memadtwo says:

    “I cling to what came after the comma”–I love that line. (K)

  3. msjadeli says:

    Your poem resonates and there is relief in that last line that is effective.

  4. I think the dizain lends itself to being split in half, but you change pace at the end of the 4th line, which throws it a little off balance. For me that emphasises the initial questioning and confusion, and then the ending brings resolution.

  5. You handled it beautifully; well crafted in all ways. I particularly like the use of the word ‘comma’ in a poem which neither has nor needs punctuation!

  6. Sabio Lantz says:

    I is nice you found a life raft to fit your suffering. Well written.

  7. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like the resolution in the last line to all the why questions.

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