In his eye I see a gleam
A bright shining beam
It appears as a flare
A flash from here to there
A glimmer of a ray
At first a subtle twinkle
Until it flickers and goes out
It’s Quadrille Monday at dVerse Poets Pub today, where we’re celebrating the 6th anniversary of the pub. Come on over and check out some other 44-word poems that include some form of the word flicker. I found this one quite fun. I looked up flicker in the online Thesaurus, and then used the words I found there.
Wonderful response to this prompt, LInda. Really enjoyed reading it.
These are all beautiful synonyms and I love how you played them here ☺💖 xxx
Thanks. This was fun to write, too. I actually had to look up “scintillation” because it didn’t seem like a synonym to me, but it fits. 😉
I love how you played with the synonyms of “flicker” 😀
A little research can be fun to kick-start poetics; nice job. I sensed some spirituality midst the metaphor, a flicker of Jesus, a blink of baptism; smile.
Thanks. Although the spiritual metaphor wasn’t intended, you know me, it just comes out even when not planned. 😉
I like how you played with the synonyms of “flicker” 👌
Thanks. I love the Thesaurus.
Especially love the second stanza. Especially reading it aloud! 🙂
I love to explore synonyms, too. I believe Emily Dickinson used synonyms extensively and in unusual ways. Fun poem!
Thanks. I haven’t read a lot of Dickenson. I’ll have to check that out.
‘subtle twinkle’ is haunting and full of mystery before another journey. A beautiful poem.
Enjoy the creativity of this poem!
I like the twinkling of the rhyme scheme. The oscillation and scintillation of his eyes, like a brilliant radiating sunbeam. And the last line saddens us, the twinkle went out. Bless you!
I was surprised by how many of the synonyms rhymed. Made this fun to write.
I love to see those twinkles in one’s eyes. But it is sad when it flickers and goes out.
Thank you Linda for being part of our celebration.
Six years of this wonderful blog is worth celebrating. 🙂
I enjoyed all the synonyms!
Thanks! It was fun to write, thinking of the slightly different meanings of each synonym.
That last line kind of gob-smacked me. Death takes away that flicker, but so, too, does so many other things. Soul-death, for examplie.
Thanks. So true that many things can extinguish that flicker.
I liked those last two lines also and thought the person might have died. If the person hasn’t died it becomes more complicated.
I really hadn’t thought that deeply about it. The words just came to me.