Last Breath – A Cinquain

in, out again
no other sound so dear
except if you spoke, one more time,
I’d hear.

I wrote this cinquain for dVerse Poets Pubs FormForAll. It is my attempt to capture my experience of Thursday last week as I sat in my sister’s hospital room, praying she had it in her to keep fighting cancer, but knowing she did not.

About Linda Kruschke

I am a Jesus Freak, and I don't care who knows it. I am a wife, mother, sister, aunt, daughter, and friend. My blood family is only part of the larger family of Christ that I belong to. I love to write, especially about my dear Savior.
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10 Responses to Last Breath – A Cinquain

  1. Cat Hill says:

    Thank you for sharing this very moving and beautiful poem. Praying for you too.


  2. kkkkaty says:

    Beautiful poem and I’m sorry…


  3. Debbie says:

    Tearing up and praying for you too, trusting Jesus to hold you now, and speak the words of comfort to you. God bless you.


  4. Sabio Lantz says:

    Ouch, very touching. I know those hours and days. Tough. Well written. Thanx for sharing the context.


  5. Rowan Taw says:

    This is so very moving – I can say no more…


  6. Mary says:

    Linda, so sorry about your sister. Your cinquain is profound, from the heart.. Not easy times for you.


  7. margaretbednar says:

    …one more time to hear a voice. Yes, a tough, very tough thing. Expressed quite lovingly, sweetly here in this poem.


  8. brian miller says:

    smiles…lovely…comforting to hear the breathing but when it stops…ah to wish for one more word…i am so sorry for your loss linda…


  9. claudia says:

    i’m sorry to hear about your sister linda…this reminded me of my dad, he died of lung cancer when i was 17..


  10. Tony says:

    This is a beautiful cinquain, born in adversity as so many of Adelaide Crapsey’s were. So sorry to hear about your loss. Will be praying for you.


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