Speaking of Gold

She saw in nature’s
beauty and majesty her first
glimpse of the Divine, swathed in green
amidst the beauty is
an echo of gold

The home He gave her
turned out to be the hardest
to hold onto as the hue
of the forbidden fruit came to
tempt her and take hold

The loss of her
innocence came much too early
even as the green leaf’s
sprout was still on the tree and a
serpent offered a lovely flower

She could have walked away but
then there was only
nothing to lose or so
said the deceiver with an
invitation of an hour

to spare for then
it would have fallen, the leaf
as the temptation subsides
and yet that was not to
be the fate of the leaf

Temptation bowed to evil, so
rich and lovely Eden
survived, but humanity sank
deep into despair so as to
succumb to grief

Now we long so
earnestly for the Light to dawn
to know where love goes
or see love come down
and heal our souls to
see the break of a new day

A day where nothing
more precious than transparent gold
will pave the way so we can
in Eden forever stay


The Meeting the Bar prompt at dVerse Poets Pub today is a Golden Shovel poem, which is a poem in which you take one or more lines from a favorite poem and use those lines to be the end-line words in a new poem. The result is that if you read down the right margin of the poem you will see the original line or lines. I chose Nothing Gold Can Stay by Robert Frost and used the entire poem. This poem was a big challenge for me because I discovered that you can’t really write a Golden Shovel poem unless you use enjambment, which I have a hard time with usually, but I think I made it work.

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27 Responses

  1. Linda, this piece is incredible. You certainly get the dVerse golden kudo for working yourself into a poetic frenzy. I love Frost too. This is very impressive; one of your best.

    • Thank you! It’s been great to get back to the poets I loved in my youth but lost touch with during so many years of major depression. Frost is foremost among them. Glad you liked this one.

  2. I like your retelling of Eve and her succumbing to temptation. It is a struggle we all face throughout our lives.

  3. I love the way you’ve told the story of Eve and the Deceiver. Wonderful lines that work very well with the chosen poem. 🙂

    • I think it is easy to blame Eve for our troubles, but if she had passed on the forbidden fruit, another one of us would have taken the bait eventually. But I do look forward to the day when the streets of heaven are as transparent gold and it will be here to stay, without sin and without temptation.

  4. Oh, Linda. I was telling Glenn earlier, one of the things I love about this form is when the original poem becomes a gorgeous backbone for the poet’s new poem. You have done that here, just beautifully. Perfect.

    • Thanks. This was really fun, maybe because it was so challenging to make it work. In theory is sounds so easy to have your end words dictated — the poem’s half written, right? — but to really make it work takes real thought.

    • I didn’t actually intend to do that when I started; In fact I started the first stanza with “I” saw. But I’m glad it turned out that way, too.

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