My Beautiful – A Ghazal
The Form for All lesson over at dVerse Poets Pub today is on the ghazal and Samuel Peralta’s ghazal sonnet. I immediately found it to be a very interesting poetry form and decided to try writing one. Mine is not a sonnet because it is more than 14 lines, and I didn’t pay any attention to meter. The refrain I settled on is “my Beautiful,” which refers both to the fact that Jesus is my Beautiful Savior and that I am His Beautiful child (since my first name is Spanish for beautiful).
In my lost and wandering youth
my soul did flee my Beautiful
During numberless crazy times
I saw only me, my Beautiful
In the darkness of past days
I could nary see my Beautiful
Take this cup of grief from me
I echo Your adamant plea, my Beautiful
With joy I did learn of Your sacrifice
on the cursed tree, my Beautiful
I knew in my heart of hearts
Your grace is the key, my Beautiful
Alive and found by My love
Your soul set free my Beautiful
My greatest desire for all my days
is to glorify thee, my Beautiful
In Your strong and lovely voice
You call me Linda Lee, my Beautiful
Beautifully done! 🙂
this sounds a happy poem. i think you enjoyed this prompt.
I LOVED this prompt! The ghazal is a terrific form to work with. 🙂 I like that you saw the underlying happiness and joy in this poem, even though it isn’t so in all parts. Peace, Linda
Lovely, spiritual prayer
A lovely reflection on your faith – and well done with the ghazal form too.
Dear Linda Lee, this is wonderful!
Thank you! I love poetry forms that lend themselves so well to Christian themes. This one was perfect for that. Peace, Linda
Wow Linda . ..this was beautiful, truly. I think you can write anything! Thank you for blessing us and God bless you!
Deb, You always say the nicest things! You definitely have the gift of encouragement. 🙂 God has truly blessed me with you as a friend. Peace, Linda
What an inspiring poem – and it’s wonderful that you used your name “Linda Lee” in the envoy to define the rhymes behind the refrain “my Beautiful”. I also love the dual reference of that refrain, that and the musicality of the rhyme-refrain makes for a wonderful lilt to your ghazal,
Samuel, Thank you for your kind and encouraging critique of my ghazal. This was truly one of the most fun forms I’ve done, a close second behind the triolet that is my favorite. Peace, Linda
A touching and realistic testament to your faith throughout your life. Love the ending where his strong voice says your name…very nice.
Thank you! This was a easy to write in some ways because it is drawn from my own life. Peace, Linda
This truly is lovely. You have a really great choice of words and one that I probably haven’t heard since I was a little girl (nary). The whole poem reminds me a little of some beautiful garden verses. It is a very special poem.
Theresa, Thanks for such a beautiful comment. 🙂 I don’t think I’ve used “nary” in a long time but it did seem to fit here. Peace, Linda
Linda, this is wonderfully prayerful. There definitely is something about putting your own name in a poem, isn’t there?
Mary, Normally I wouldn’t do that, but it’s part of the Ghazal form. I was just going to use Linda, but there aren’t very many good words that rhyme with Linda. 🙂 Peace, Linda
linda lee…smiles…calls you by name…in his strong and lovely voice…this is beautiful linda…i like too how you point out how ours eyes fall on us occassionally as well and miss out…